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(Contains: violence/gore and strong language)
All original characters and names belong to me and are not to be used without my permission.
All characters and names taken from the video game, Mass Effect, are the property of Bioware and EA Games.

This fanfic is set between the events of Mass Effect 2 and 3.
This is not a Commander Shepard story.

Note: This is just a teaser of a full story. Only chapters one through eight are included.

Pic of the crew is here: the-joeblack.deviantart.com/ar…
Pic of the ship is here: the-joeblack.deviantart.com/ar…

Let me know what you think. As fans of the series, your opinions matter to me :)
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Turbulence1973 Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Excellent read! But it really reads like you are trying to turn Wolfe into a Shepard clone. I could understand a cameo of one or two characters starting out, but you have damn near the whole team from ME2 in there. Like I like the connection to Zaheed, and the Alliance connection to Hackett made sense. I didn't like seeing the rest of Shepard's crew. What I did like is Chapter 6 when you started meeting your other crew. And then you gave Wolfe a Normandy mk 1? I didn't care for that. Don't get me wrong the Normandy is a bad ass ship, but give her something of her own. You're not writing Shepard mk 2, you're writing the adventures of Jessie Wolfe.
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The-JoeBlack Feb 20, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
You're right in a lot of ways W. I used a lot of the crew that we already know for a couple of reasons. Firstly because none of them for much air time in ME3 and also because I thought it would give the reader something they know to bring them in to Wolfe's story.

This story is really just designed to introduce Jess and give you more of an insider look at what's going on behind enemy lines with the Cerberus bad guys. I try to give them an equal amount of chapters but they'll merge at some point.

A lot of this story is about Kat too. She'd got some messy stuff in her life and maybe Jess will end up helping her with it or maybe she'll end up killing her.

The story I'm hoping to write after this will faze out the characters from the game (maybe with the exception of Zaeed and Hackett). Then you'll have all new characters that will be different to anything we've seen in the ME universe before

Oh and I promise I haven't forgotten about the collaborative story btw. I've been so incredibly busy at work the lady couple of weeks that all I want to do when I get home is sleep :P
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Turbulence1973 Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I definitely want to read more about Kat, and look forward to that.

I thought your story was supposed te be set between ME1 and ME2, when did you change it?
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The-JoeBlack Feb 20, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
Oh balls did I write that it was set between 1 and 2?? I was sure I wrote that it was set between 2 and 3. That's why I'm using the story explain things like why Jack wanted to to the Grissom academy in ME3 etc. Just trying to fill the gaps in story while introducing just a couple of my OCs.

I feel bad for Jess because she doesn't have as interesting a backstory as Kat but that will change once I've had a chance to introduce her twin brother etc :)
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Turbulence1973 Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Think about a backstory like this, you want it basic. Think how they did Shepards in ME1. You had a few basic tid bits that got expounded on later. Do it that way, you don't have to give the whoel cow away in the first act, just a small glass of milk to wet their appetites.

And yeah I gathered the new time frame as soon as I read it. Not hard to decipher :) But ditch Shepard's crew fast, and start with your own. My two cents anyway.
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The-JoeBlack Feb 20, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
I have plans to ditch at least one at the end of the next two chapters actually. You've been using your psychic powers again W...
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Hey, I got to ask, are you going to make a story about Wolfe after Mass Effect 3? Because I wondered what would happen to her after this story and how will she feel when about half her crewmates die in the actual game.
P.S. I like the story... however, I was wondering if you could create an honorable Cerberus antagonist for your future stories. Other than that, I am really loving this story... keep it up!
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The-JoeBlack Jul 10, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Honestly I wasn't too sure but I guess it depends on if people like it enough. I'm currently working on more art for it and the next few chapters. You'll soon see all her regular crew in 3d form in maybe a week or two. And I guarantee you'll find a hero hidden somewhere in the Cerberus team before the end of the current story. They're not all bad after all :)
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It took a long time for me to finally sit down and read this. I was waiting so that I could give my full attention and not feel rushed. Bravo! I really enjoyed what you wrote. Yes there are some mistakes here and there, but the story is great. I look forward to reading/seeing what you do with this in the future!
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The-JoeBlack May 15, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Thanks a lot! And thanks for reading it too. I do plan on pulling my finger out and finishing it soon :)
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