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(Contains: violence/gore and strong language)
All original characters and names belong to me and are not to be used without my permission.
All characters and names taken from the video game, Mass Effect, are the property of Bioware and EA Games.
This fanfic is set between the events of Mass Effect 2 and 3.
This is not a Commander Shepard story.
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Update: Chapter 12 added. Part of Kat's many secrets has been revealed :)

Note: The whole damn thing needs to be proof read still. I haven't even proofed Chapter 11 myself yet but I was on a roll...

Let me know what you think. As fans of the series, your opinions matter to me :)
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:iconqedrian41:
Qedrian41 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2015
Best Mass Effect fan fiction I've read in a LONG time. Can't wait for more of this!
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The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2015  Professional Traditional Artist
Thanks a lot for the high praise! Hoping to knock out another chapter tomorrow :)
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Qedrian41 Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2015
I'll be looking forward to it.:happybounce: 
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DeadHero23 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2015
When the next chapter come
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:iconthe-joeblack:
The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2015  Professional Traditional Artist
As soon as I get some more time off work ;)
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GhostShell5 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2015
Love it. Can't wait for the rest. Keep up the good work.
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:iconthe-joeblack:
The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2015  Professional Traditional Artist
Thanks a lot! It's slow coming but I'll finish it one day :P
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ProtocolX27 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2014
Killer!! Didn't know you had that much into it! I need to find some time check this!
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:iconthe-joeblack:
The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2015  Professional Traditional Artist
It's only amateur stuff but it gives me more reason to make pics and models of my guys when they've got a backstory :P
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ProtocolX27 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2015
Sure, it helps! From what I read so far though, it's got some heart.
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:iconthe-joeblack:
The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2015  Professional Traditional Artist
:hug: So much work to go for no reward :P
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ProtocolX27 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2015
Doesn't Satisfaction flip the bill? :lol:
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:iconthe-joeblack:
The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2015  Professional Traditional Artist
I can't get no.....da da da da da... satisfaction!
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Guerilla-in-da-Mist Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2014
Hey Joe. :)
Could you please do me a favor? Could you please write the whole story again in German? :D I would like to read it so badly, because I can imagine that your story is amazing, but sadly my English isn't good enough to read so many English. I would get headache. :/
Of course it was only a little joke to ask you for a German version, but still, I wish I could read your story. Anyways, you'll get of course a fave from me, because I KNOW this story is very well written. :)
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:iconthe-joeblack:
The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2015  Professional Traditional Artist
Lol! Do you think Google translator would let me copy and paste the whole story in there to translate it for me?? :P
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Turbulence1973 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Excellent read! But it really reads like you are trying to turn Wolfe into a Shepard clone. I could understand a cameo of one or two characters starting out, but you have damn near the whole team from ME2 in there. Like I like the connection to Zaheed, and the Alliance connection to Hackett made sense. I didn't like seeing the rest of Shepard's crew. What I did like is Chapter 6 when you started meeting your other crew. And then you gave Wolfe a Normandy mk 1? I didn't care for that. Don't get me wrong the Normandy is a bad ass ship, but give her something of her own. You're not writing Shepard mk 2, you're writing the adventures of Jessie Wolfe.
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The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
You're right in a lot of ways W. I used a lot of the crew that we already know for a couple of reasons. Firstly because none of them for much air time in ME3 and also because I thought it would give the reader something they know to bring them in to Wolfe's story.

This story is really just designed to introduce Jess and give you more of an insider look at what's going on behind enemy lines with the Cerberus bad guys. I try to give them an equal amount of chapters but they'll merge at some point.

A lot of this story is about Kat too. She'd got some messy stuff in her life and maybe Jess will end up helping her with it or maybe she'll end up killing her.

The story I'm hoping to write after this will faze out the characters from the game (maybe with the exception of Zaeed and Hackett). Then you'll have all new characters that will be different to anything we've seen in the ME universe before

Oh and I promise I haven't forgotten about the collaborative story btw. I've been so incredibly busy at work the lady couple of weeks that all I want to do when I get home is sleep :P
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Turbulence1973 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I definitely want to read more about Kat, and look forward to that.

I thought your story was supposed te be set between ME1 and ME2, when did you change it?
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The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
Oh balls did I write that it was set between 1 and 2?? I was sure I wrote that it was set between 2 and 3. That's why I'm using the story explain things like why Jack wanted to to the Grissom academy in ME3 etc. Just trying to fill the gaps in story while introducing just a couple of my OCs.

I feel bad for Jess because she doesn't have as interesting a backstory as Kat but that will change once I've had a chance to introduce her twin brother etc :)
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Turbulence1973 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Think about a backstory like this, you want it basic. Think how they did Shepards in ME1. You had a few basic tid bits that got expounded on later. Do it that way, you don't have to give the whoel cow away in the first act, just a small glass of milk to wet their appetites.

And yeah I gathered the new time frame as soon as I read it. Not hard to decipher :) But ditch Shepard's crew fast, and start with your own. My two cents anyway.
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:iconthe-joeblack:
The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
I have plans to ditch at least one at the end of the next two chapters actually. You've been using your psychic powers again W...
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reachfan2 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013
Hey, I got to ask, are you going to make a story about Wolfe after Mass Effect 3? Because I wondered what would happen to her after this story and how will she feel when about half her crewmates die in the actual game.
P.S. I like the story... however, I was wondering if you could create an honorable Cerberus antagonist for your future stories. Other than that, I am really loving this story... keep it up!
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:iconthe-joeblack:
The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Honestly I wasn't too sure but I guess it depends on if people like it enough. I'm currently working on more art for it and the next few chapters. You'll soon see all her regular crew in 3d form in maybe a week or two. And I guarantee you'll find a hero hidden somewhere in the Cerberus team before the end of the current story. They're not all bad after all :)
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Ravenmare1111 Featured By Owner May 15, 2013
It took a long time for me to finally sit down and read this. I was waiting so that I could give my full attention and not feel rushed. Bravo! I really enjoyed what you wrote. Yes there are some mistakes here and there, but the story is great. I look forward to reading/seeing what you do with this in the future!
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:iconthe-joeblack:
The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner May 15, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Thanks a lot! And thanks for reading it too. I do plan on pulling my finger out and finishing it soon :)
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:iconreachfan2:
reachfan2 Featured By Owner May 12, 2013
Can you make a written story of this? Or an image story?
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:iconthe-joeblack:
The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Yeah I'm thinking of making a comic of it one day :)
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Nerdman3000 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013
By the way, can you release a word document version of this story?
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:iconthe-joeblack:
The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
I would but Deviantart only allows me to upload PDF or Notepad files. And if I changed it to a Notepad file I'd lose all my formatting :(
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Nerdman3000 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2013
Could you then perhaps send it to me by email. My email is julienyanes.schoolhouseprep@gmail.com.
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Nerdman3000 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013
Will Shepard be making a Cameo? And will Shepard be Male or Female if he/she does?
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:iconthe-joeblack:
The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
I don't think Shepard will make an appearance at all. I'm planning for the story to fit in as seamlessly as possible between ME2 and 3 so I don't want to disturb the stories of any characters that turned up as main parts of the third game.

I think at the start I made mention of Shepard in a sentence though and I think I said she was female. Pretty sure I did anyway :)
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The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
I don't think Shepard will make an appearance at all. I'm planning for the story to fit in as seamlessly as possible between ME2 and 3 so I don't want to disturb the stories of any characters that turned up as main parts of the third game.

I think at the start I made mention of Shepard in a sentence though and I think I said she was female. Pretty sure I did anyway :)
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comanderpatterson Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013
I cant Wait to find out what happens next. When you get the next how ever many chapters up could you send me the link? Keep up the good work. :)
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:iconthe-joeblack:
The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Thanks! I'll do my best to try and remember :)
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NRBarnard Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
well now that I have gotten around to finish this story, go to say can't wait to see where it goes, also this has given me the motivation to work on my Mass Effect story
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The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Thanks for taking the time to read it! It was a bit long for a teaser but I wanted to give a good feeling of what was coming later :)

Glad I could help with the motivation too! It's always really hard to come by imo :)
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Rama-Kay Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow! I gotta say: I LOVE IT! and damn man, you draw, make awesome 3D models and write is there anything you can't do?

and seriously, This was very well-written. I can't wait to read the whole story !
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The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Aww thanks! I hope you're not just being nice though :P

This is one thing I can't do.... I can't forgive criminals for their life of evil deeds... *If you read that again but in a Batman voice it sounds cool* :P
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Rama-Kay Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No! I'm not just being nice! :icontuzkicryplz:

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The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Bahaha. I believe you :P
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Rama-Kay Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:XD: YAY! :rofl:
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Hornyzombee Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013
I am liking it so far. IMO simple and effective writing works best and this has been achieved successfully. Do a pic of the bad guys, they are very interesting. LOVE!! :)
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The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Aww thank HZ! Means a lot coming from an awesome writer like you. I'm working in a 3D pic of the bad guys now :)
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YukiMinamoto Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, I love it so far! So let me as some questions in order to clear up some things:

1. Are Shepard's crew: Liara, Garrus, ect. with Jane before they were recruited into Jessica's crew after a certain amount of months/years?

2. Where is Jane after all this time? Is she going lone-wolf by this time?

3. Does Jessica have any other siblings or family members as of yet?

I think that's it for now. ^_^

So far, I LOVE IT. Much better than your first fanfiction. It flows nicely and the details give you images rather than going so much into detail that the reader skips through the paragraph.

I really do love its simplicity of it. The enemies have personality, good and bad flaws with them. They're also very human and relate-able, something that we all badly need in some fanfictions.
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Something still bothers me. When someone talks, there's no seperate spacing and it creates some confusion to your readers. For example:

Piotr grinned menacingly and looked around at his team who all started laughing at the suggestion
that they had to do anything. “Oh, so sorry comrade,” he said, standing up and walking towards the
engineer. “Would you like me to move some ammunition for you?” He suddenly grabbed the smaller
man by his collar and pushed an M-358 Talon pistol up against his faceplate. “There’s some bullets in
here I’d be happy to put somewhere else.“


I found this kind of hard to read since there's dialogue. So here's what I would do.

Piotr grinned menacingly and looked around at his team who all started laughing at the suggestion that they had to do anything.

“Oh, so sorry comrade,” he said, standing up and walking towards the engineer.

“Would you like me to move some ammunition for you?” He suddenly grabbed the smaller
man by his collar and pushed an M-358 Talon pistol up against his faceplate.

“There’s some bullets in here I’d be happy to put somewhere else.“


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So work on that! ^_^ So far, everything's good. I would like to see what Yuki and her comrades look like besides their clothing. Something like hair, eye color, and ect.

So far, they're faceless elite mooks to me right now.

And Kat really looks like she's going to be a WONDERFULLY AWESOME enemy for Jessica. :heart: She's strong, loyal and caring towards her "girls".

BTW, are you going to do a picture of the enemies? I would really like to see what they look like. And with little Yuki's age of being a tender age of 15 and going into battle, I wouldn't be surprised if she would be suffering from mental illness and PTSD when all of this is over. Poor girl.
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The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Thanks for the incredibly constructive feedback! I’ll try to answer everything as well as I can :)

1. Liara, Garrus and the others I haven’t used won’t make it on to Jessica’s team full time. There may be a cameo though ;)

2. This story won’t really go in to too much detail about what Jane is up to but I think at this point she’ll still be in a little trouble with the Alliance after all the stuff at the ending of ME2.

3. I have been considering that Jessica could have a twin brother ;)

Thanks for the compliment on the writing style. I did a LOT of research on correct story writing and format before sitting down to start this one. It really helped me in getting to the point in paragraphs and making the imagery come out in words.

Glad you like the bad guys. Personally, I’ve always been far more emotionally involved in a story when I can related to both the good guys and the bad guys and I love hearing a story from two angles :)

That’s really helpful about the spacing thing with some of the longer paragraphs. Couldn’t see much on it in the online tutorials but you’re right, that does read easier :)

I’m planning on actually putting pictures to go with some of the scenes from the story. I’m currently making a 3D model of Katherine, Tatiana and Yuki but the rest of the Phantom team probably won’t get as much spotlight. I’m making a model of Piotr and Darius too so people can really see what they look like. I’ll be doing a nice one of that scene near the end where Kat’s whole team is standing there just looking cool :P

Glad you like Kat too! She is essentially a bad guy but I think when people see what bad people are like in every day life it’s hard not to relate to them in some way.

Poor Yuki is going to have a few issues going forward being that young. LOTS of major twists and turns coming up that I can’t wait to write. I’ll be working on getting images of the original characters first though. I need to choose a face and hairstyle for Yuki but I mostly know what all the rest look like.

Again, thank for the feedback. It helps a lot :)
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YukiMinamoto Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much Joe! That answers all of my questions! And Elliot! I can't wait to see him! :iconiloveitmoreplz: Kyaaa~ I'm his biggest fangirl right now! :iconlaughingplz:

Oh, and if you need a Beta-reader, I'm here for you.

Before I forget, is Jessica going to be paired up with someone? I just wanted to ask.
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The-JoeBlack Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Sorry for the late reply! I got buried under messages when I took two weeks off for a holiday and it's taken me forever to catch up.

Yes Jessica will be paired with someone but it's not a major LI from the games. I kind of already gave it away in one of my pics. Whoops! :P
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YukiMinamoto Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Kelly? Aw, how cute! ^^

And it's fine! I don't mind. I should be getting to bed anyway. College life is killing me again.
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